I decided to post an excerpt from chapter one to get opinions on the story. I'm making pretty good progress so far. I haven't finished playing through the uni update which is next so I figured I'd do this to fill in some of the time :).
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Paerolia was once a prestigious school for young elves where members of the royal court were trained for their duties. It was one of the few buildings not destroyed in the war, but had remained closed for centuries. It would open in a week to train the first royal court since the war.
“What’s so wrong with LaQuest Beach Preparatory School? All my friends are going there, not Paerolia!” Arwen said.
“Is she still going on about this?” Elvin asked as he walked into the kitchen.
“Of course she is. She’s been going on about it since her birthday last month,” Tessa said laughing.
“Well she needs to stop it,” he said with a frown.
“SHE can hear you. I’m standing right here,” Arwen said rolling her eyes.
“Then hear this: You are to be the Queen of Vasadori, a position of great honor and responsibility. Paerolia will prepare you for that position. Do you have any idea how many young females, human and elven, would love to be in your position?” Elvin asked.
“I don’t care! Why don’t you say what you really mean, Elvin? You want Vanya to be queen, just say it!” Arwen shouted.
“Arwen……..” Tessa began.
“I’ve made it no secret that I think my daughter would make a more fitting queen,” he said.
“Dad!”
“Well it’s true, Vanya. You are so much more better prepared, so much better suited…….”
“Do you think I asked for this? That I wanted this? Do you think growing up in a house with a step-father that despises you is easy?” Arwen said in a deadly calm voice. The red in her eyes began to glow ever so lightly.
“Arwen, calm down,” Tessa said.
“Do you see what I mean? Do you see how out of control she is? Truly her father’s daughter,” Elvin said distastefully. In a flash Arwen had him pinned up against the kitchen wall, slamming a hole into the drywall.
“Arwen, no!” Tessa yelled as she ran around the island.
“Yes, I am my father’s daughter. Which means I can end your pathetic existence without even trying……..but I won’t. Do you know why? Because no matter what you may think, I am not my father. His dark elf blood does flow through my veins, but it does not decide who I am. You would be wise to remember that. I’m going to Kiara’s, be back soon,” Arwen said as she let Elvin drop to the floor.
“I’ll come with you,” Vanya said quietly. Tessa helped Elvin up from the floor.
“She’s not ready. She’s out of control,” Elvin said.
“She’s only like that when it comes to you. It’s been twelve years Elvin, why must you still take your anger out on her?” Tessa asked sadly.
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